Archive | December, 2012

Look! I’ve been tagged!

12 Dec

Tag, you’re it! Author Niecey Roy ‘got me’ with a new version of the game. The requirement is to copy several paragraphs from your current manuscript with the word “look” in it. Here it is!!!


With Stacy’s massive meal of fried chicken, corn on the cob, baked beans and potato salad weighing him down, Jimmy sat on the patio and watched his son chase Stacy’s hyperactive Chihuahua in dizzying circles around the backyard landscaping.

Stacy sipped on a glass of sweet tea, contentment lighting her eyes as she caressed her pregnant stomach. “Are you sure you don’t want a piece of pie?”

“Positive, Stace.”

“It’s apple. Your favorite.”

He smiled at her sweet tenacity. “Thanks, but no.”

“I have whipped cream,” she cajoled in singsong. “Homemade.”

Jimmy laughed. “Seriously, Stace, I’m stuffed.”

“I’ll take a piece,” Dan said.

Stacy shut down the charm and glared at him. “Get it yourself, dupek.”

“Oh, come on, Stace! I swear I didn’t look,” Dan insisted for what had to be the twentieth time that evening.

Jimmy bit back a laugh, hiding it in a cough.

Pushing up from her chair, Stacy snapped a retort entirely in Polish and stormed into the house, slamming the door so hard the windows rattled. Jimmy got lost in the literal translation, but not in the intention. She was not happy.

Dan cursed under his breath and took a swig of his beer.

Jimmy turned to make sure Stacy was out of earshot before he asked, “What did she say?”

“No clue. I’ve never heard that one before.”

“Uh oh,” Jimmy said, mimicking one of Brayden’s favorite sayings.

“You’re tellin’ me. I have a feeling that damn dog and I are going to be bunking together tonight.”

“Did you look?” Jimmy asked.

“No, I didn’t look,” Dan said. “And even if I had looked, I wouldn’t have known what the hell I was looking at.”

“Well, Dan, boys have a penis and girls have a—”

“I know that, smartass.” Dan laughed. “To tell you the truth, I had no clue what I was looking at the entire time we were getting the ultrasound done. The tech lady pointed everything out, and Stace ooh-ed and ahh-ed like crazy, but it was all blurry, mumbo jumbo to me. All I know is he’s healthy, and that’s all that matters.”

“Or she,” Jimmy said.

“He,” Dan insisted.

“So, you did look.”

Dan turned in his chair and scanned the house, double-checking the coast was clear before he leaned into Jimmy and whispered, “Okay, so maybe I saw something, but like I say, I don’t know for sure if it was what I think it was, or if it wasn’t… but I’m going with was.”

“Or maybe she got your nose,” Jimmy said, and then quickly ducked to avoid Dan’s backhand.


Author GM Barlean is joining in on the fun! Visit her blog to take a “look” her upcoming excerpt and check out all of her fabulous postings!

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